my first wad:/

[ghostintheshell0225]

Hello all.
This is my first wad and I would really appreciate if you would let me know just how shortsighted an amateur editor can be when it comes to his own creation. Basically, if its trash, then tell me its trash.
I actually just figured out water a few days ago:)
So here are a few screenshots and the download link...

The reason the platforms holding the rings go down at the same time is because they are all four tied to the same control sector... I will fix this immediately.

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http://www.sendspace.com/file/r14byz

 

[tailsmastermind]

Well, I have good and bad for you. So, let's start with the bad:
Way too many rings. This is okay, sorta, but you have a lot of rings clustered in one area. Although the bobbing platforms they are on makes it a little hard to collect them.
The bobbing platforms all move in unison. That is bad, because I could be standing on one platform, and out of nowhere, it moves, and my jump gets changed. It is a tad weird. I don't know how to fix that.
The waterfall is really big, and at the top, there are too many bubbles. I guess to make the bomb rings more difficult to get?
What seemed like some weird spring placement as well.
Good stuff:
I liked the concept of the level. It is big enough to hold 8 people and have an enjoyable match.
Not a lot of overused item boxes.

Well, there's some stuff to work on. Mainly, decrease the ring count and decrease the size of the waterfall. Good luck to ya.

 

[sonicfreak94]

I don't know how to fix that.

I do! =D

All you gotta do is split the lindef and set another tag. So say there's two, now that they have different tags, they'll bob indipendantly.

 

[Kuja]

This match map is better than most first ones I've seen, so you should at least give yourself a pat on the back. :)


The map is orderly, not cramped, and has plenty of elevation. However, there are, as tailsmastermind stated, waaay too many rings on those platforms. You probably would only need 1/4 of them on there.

The underwater area looks good, but it could do with some more landscape cover down there, due to the rail rings in the map- there really is nowhere to hide from a good sniper underwater.

Some things I thought were nice included that rising platform ring around the center of the level. I also liked the fountain itself, though you might have a hard time finding someone if you can't see through the waterfalls(I really don't know what you could do to solve this, I'm afraid). What I would have really liked to see was a few platforms to fill all that empty air that was present above the water. Also, maybe you should consider putting some land masses here or there on the water?

All in all, a solid first map. I know I'm definitely impressed.

 

[marcsancessoftware]

(...)Basically, if its trash, then tell me its trash.(...)

Why is it trash? Your first level is very good! Well done!

 

[wise.rain]

I didn't play this in a netgame, but from what I see it's too open, too many clusters of rings (including the long lines of rings, not just the ones on the bobbing platforms), clusters of items (the air bubbles at the top of that giant waterfall), not much decoration, and quite a few random boxes. I'd read through this if you haven't already. You should put grass on the edges of where the grass flat ends, this link will tell you how to do it. You should also use just one random box, but don't use the random box monitor, use a different monitor (like the silver rings monitor) and check respawn randomly box. To be honest, this level is better then my first level (unreleased).

 

[User #3801]

You should change the color of your water to blue instead of gray. But the level's pretty good, otherwise.

 

[RetardondoMaximoso]

Nice job, also, considering the fact that i did help you with it and you couldn't have made it without me.
CREDIT PLEASE?